למביני אנגלית טוב - זקוק לבדיקה..

[B0necrack3R]

היי חברה אם אתם חושבים שרמת הידע שלכם היא מספיק גבוה כדי לבדוק מבחינה דיקדוקית את הטקסט הבא שכתבתי אשמח מאוד

אם תמצאו טעויות ותתקנו אותי!!

תודה מראש..

The Use Of Force

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In my opinion the word "Force" as a verb

means to make someone or something to

do something against his mind by violence.

The force can be used in a different cases.

In some of them ,the force can be used for

a good targets and in some of them for bad.

I think that the word "Force" which appears

in the title of the story("The Use Of Force")

is very connected to the story itself.

In the story the word "Force" was used exactly

as I described in paragraph 1, for example when

the doctor forced the girl to open her mouth,

which act was only for a good target.

I think that the doctor in the story did

a right thing by forcing the patient to open

her mouth, because he wanted to help her and

save her life.

[^HocK^]

הנה הטקסט אחרי התיקון..

תיקנתי מה שיכלתי..

The Use Of Force

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In my opinion, the use of the word "Force" as a verb

means, to make someone do something against his mind by using violence.

The force can be used in a different cases

some of them are with good perpouse and

some of them for bad.

I think that the word "Force" which appears

in the title of the story ("The Use Of Force")

is very connected to the story itself,

In the story the word "Force" was used exactly

as I described in paragraph 1, for example when

the doctor forced the girl to open her mouth,

which his act was only for a good target.

I think that the doctor in the story did

a right thing by forcing the patient to open

her mouth, because he wanted to help her and

save her life.

יכול להיות שיש אצלי טעות אחת או שניים...

תקנו אם תמצאו.

[YO-YO]

בפסקה הראשונה, בשורה הרביעית צריך לדעתי להוריד את ה "A".

[B0necrack3R]

ok tnx by now..

[OR007]

במקום against his mind

לא עדיף לשים against his willing, בהנחה שככה מאייתים רצון.

כי אחרי הכל זה נגד רצונו.

[B0necrack3R]

אפשר

אבל אני לא חושב שהמורה תוריד לי על זה נקוד.

[MiniMizer]

Edited and Revised

In my opinion, the use of the word "Force" as a verb

means, to make someone do something against his will by using violence.

The force can be used in different cases -

some of them are with good purpose and

some of with a bad one.

I think that the word "Force" which appears

in the title of the story ("The Use Of Force")

is very connected to the story itself,

In the story the word "Force" was used exactly

as I described in paragraph 1, for example when

the doctor forced the girl to open her mouth,

his act was only for a good cause.

I think that the doctor in the story did

a right thing by forcing the patient to open

her mouth, because he wanted to help her and

save her life.

[Sunny Jim]

In my opinion, the use of the word "Force" as a verb

means to make someone do something against his will by using violence.

The force can be used in different cases -

some of them are with good purposes and

some of with a bad ones.

I believe that the word "Force" which appears

in the title of the story ("The Use Of Force")

is very connected to the story itself.

In the story the word "Force" was used exactly

as I described in paragraph 1. For example, when

the doctor forced the girl to open her mouth,

his act was only for a good cause.

I think that the doctor in the story did

the right thing by forcing the patient to open

her mouth, because he wanted to help her and

save her life.

אם אתה רוצה שלמות אז THIS IS IT ;D

[B0necrack3R]

tnx very much!

[useless]

The use of the word "Force" as a verb means to use physical power

or violence to compel or restrain another person without a

given permission. The force can be used in different cases -

some for a good purpose, and some for a bad one.

I believe that the mentioned word, which can also be spotted

in the very title of the story ["The Use of Force"],

is very connoted to the plot itself, of where the word "Force"

was used exacatly as I described it in paragraph 1. For instance,

when the doctor 'forced' his patient to open her mouth,

his act was merely done in order to save her life, not to harm her.

Some of the modifications:

* Dropped "In my opinion". We're not in a kindergarten.

* Changed "means to make someone do something" (...) to a better,

more professional-wise substitute.

* "With good purposes" -> for a good purpose.

* "With a bad ones" -> with bad ones -> for a bad one.

* "I believe that the word "Force" -> I believe that the mentioned

word (...); repeatetive.

* "which appears in the title of the story" -> which can also be

spotted in the very title of the story.

* Decapitalized "The Use Of Force" ( -> The Use of Force)

* connected -> connoted.

* "For example" -> For instance.

[x-dude]

למה לא להריץ Spell check וזהו?

[useless]

כי אולי יש גם פאקטורים אחרים כמו דקדוק והתנסחות? :

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